So I’m up on the web knockin’ around on forums and such.
A songwriter posted a lyric about a wheelchair bound vet trying to snag a ride home from a truck stop.
Interesting concept and I’ve no doubt a writer could really pull on the old heart-strings and make a very goose-bumpy song… if written proper that is.
Problem was… the title had everything to do with the waiting, and nothing to do with the struggle as a wounded vet in a wheelchair being ignored daily.
That was oops numero uno.
He had a killer line in it about still fighting like a soldier which begged to be the title, but it was hidden in a verse, oops numero dos.
The title, Still Fighting Like a Soldier has an element in it which I talk about in the October 2016 issue of Tune Booster which draws people in just from reading it.
In fact, I give you way too much info on titles… prob’ly a year’s worth of titles you can totally rip off in that issue alone, besides showing you tons of EASY-TO-Find places you can snag them, what to put in them, and what to do with them.
This writer was making a big mistake with the title he had. Not just in the emotional focus but other things which I graciously pointed out to him.
Result? He wants more feedback on a re-write.
Tell ya what… that’s a sign of a mature writer… willing to go back and diddle without feeling offended and come back looking for more input. No doubt he writes good stuff or will.
Kind of like Rocky Balboa on songwriting never seems to give up and comes out swinging.
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