Can’t tell you how many times I’ve seen the movie, Crocodile Dundee over the years.
Mick making his entrance by tossing a knife through the pub’s door and wrestling a stuffed croc to the bar.
Swappin’ turns trying to knock the beer of Donk’s head with a punch to the gut.
Blowing the froth off a couple with the boys.
Funny movie.
There’s a scene where he, the backwoods Aussie, was taken to a yuppie New York party.
He sees this bloke snorting a line of coke in the back room.
Oh wow, an inner rhyme right there.
Anyway, Sue, his party companion had to explain the guy wasn’t fighting off a cold, but getting a buzz.
Mick says, “Oh. Sorta like shoving a Blow Fly up your nose.”
Yeah, right-o Mick.
The only coke I like comes in 20 Oz. bottles and is easy to find in any store.
The white stuff ain’t so easy to find from what I’ve heard.
Thing is, sometimes writers think finding good song lines ain’t much easier.
But they’re plenty legal and a damned sight cheaper,
Fact is, they aren’t that hard to score, you can snort them anytime you want, and the only thing you’re pushin’ is a pen or keys at the computer.
Look. Songwriters are everywhere.
If you want to stand out, you need to write interesting lines.
If there’s one common thing I see in writer’s who ask for evaluations is they’re relying on the music and melody to carry lines which are what I’d call, place holders.
They sort of say what the writer wants or intends, but…
Frankly, can be boring to listen to.
And, it doesn’t have to be that way.
For instance, snort these lines…
“You walked with me in the sand,
We walked together hand in hand,
The moon lit up the mainland,
A perfect summer night.”
Does that give you much of an image in your mind?
I didn’t think so.
There is a way to put some juice in them though.
They’d be unrecognizable from where they’re at now, but keep the intended image and emotion.
Look. The test of a good lyric and good song is quiet tables at a gig or house concert. A great sincere applause from an audience because you had them in your grip.
I’m not talking the applause we’ve all gotten just because the song was over and they felt they better do something because it’s awkward to look at their shoes while the singer rings out the last chord.
You do know the difference, don’t you?
Anyway, August’s Tune Booster gives you some methods to come up with some killer lines.
Ninja they are not. They are simple.
But so many writers surprisingly don’t use them.
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